Seeking Feedback on Copy Targeting Senior Software Engineering Leaders in IT Staff Augmentation

Hey team, I just wrapped up the OOF cohort this week and would love to get feedback on some copy I'm generating. I'm targeting Senior Software Engineering Leaders at companies hiring for senior roles who are taking longer than expected to fill them. Since my client offers IT staff augmentation (a highly commoditized space where driving engagement is tough) any tips or suggestions from experienced peers would be hugely appreciated! Here is a sample of what I've been working on: Clay Messaging Example